i remember the warm
brick
ground in my backyard,
the summer mornings when the
sun would heat them, and
i would go out and soak in the
sun.
i remember yellow walls.
i remember jeremy my first
boyfriend.
i remember mud fights in
a stream with jocelyn,
the mud
dried and we washed off.
i remember the tingly
feeling i felt every-
time _____ held my hand.
i remember when _ _ _ _ _
held my hand i
felt
nothing.
i remember being dissapointed.
That is a perspective on life that I have not seen before. It gives a feeling of mystery.
ReplyDeleteloved your format for the poem, actually i just loved the whole poem
ReplyDeleteVery nice. The stuff you excluded from your poem actually added so much. Good work. This is a great love poem. You capture some strong memories, but do a great job of trying to figure out relationships and attraction.
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